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Old 07-27-2016, 01:11 PM
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Default Career Changer Resume Critique Request

Hi AO members, any input/advice on my resume would be greatly appreciated.
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Old 07-27-2016, 05:38 PM
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The first bullet is really long and hard to read. There's no need to mention Company X in a Company X bullet imo. Will "spares process" be clear when you see the company or job title? I can make a guess, but it's not clear without them. The part where you "provide accuracy" is really awkward wording.

The 3rd bullet is inconsistent with the rest in that it doesn't start with a verb.

You don't need the "responsible for". You can just say you actually did that instead. I believe it also made you think you had to write in present tense, even though "responsible for" could imply either the verb "is" or "was". And "responsible for" is inconsistent with the other bullets in the section.

And the tense may not be bad except that you start the next bullet with the ambiguous word "Process". It is not ambiguous in past tense.

1st job 1 bullet is also inconsistent with the others. Adding "as requested per customer" doesn't make the bullet stronger.

I'd abbreviate B.A. so the major sticks out a little more.

There's no need for the hyphen after "in". I'd get rid of "Microsoft".

I'd not bother with the part about references. It goes without saying.

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Old 07-27-2016, 08:57 PM
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Thanks a lot for your time and input.
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